I admit I didn’t make it even a third of the way through this story. With that being said, you definitely need to proof read your work before submitting it, or else have someone do it for you. Japanese sex Your writing shows some talent, so don’t give up.anonymous readerReport 2012-12-02 20:52:17I’m wondering if English is your first language, if it is you really need to proofread your work. Way too choppy and hard to read. Not perfect but a very good read ! With that being said, you definitely need to proof read your work before submitting it, or else have someone do it for you.
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Kadall Master / Wine Flaming
