yes it needs paragraphs and proper grammar, but i enjoyed the natural everyday speaking nature of it. Desi sex yes it needs paragraphs and proper grammar, but i enjoyed the natural everyday speaking nature of it. cheersAnonymous readerReport 2009-11-26 18:01:23Ur all assholes. Look forward to reading more. yes it needs paragraphs and proper grammar, but i enjoyed the natural everyday speaking nature of it. Made it more believable. Well done mate. Made it more believable. 10 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2013-09-05 01:08:35you are all dick heads, It is great story, because it is true, unlike 90% of the bullshit ‘true stories’ on here. Good job 4 ur first try, try to discribe it a bit moreanonReport 2009-11-21 00:01:24good storyboothillReport 2009-11-17 03:56:22Sorry about the way i’ve written my story,I didn’t realise I was gonna be judged on my grammer,it’s
