I second the emotion of ending a sentence with a period, not a camma. Hugh_Jardonanonymous readerReport 2012-04-16 20:30:24Good story, but needs some work on the spelling/grammar front. Xxx video 12 comments«123»anonymous readerReport 2013-07-29 21:04:10have to agree not worth reading without PARAGRAPHS PARAGRAPHS PARAGRAPHSanonymous readerReport 2012-07-04 20:54:39Please forget part 2. You screwed up this part so bad that I will not read it anyway. If you need someone to read over your stuff, just ask, most people are willing to help out. Hugh_Jardonanonymous readerReport 2012-04-16 20:30:24Good story, but needs some work on the spelling/grammar front. Keep up the good work, and with practice, you can be one of this site’s best writers. Daniels«123» You’re too close to the action, as it were, to notice little things like continuity errors, word choice, and tenses.
