It felt like you were just listing everything that happened. 3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2010-09-06 11:10:21It would have been an alright story line if u knew how to write properly. XVideos Detail matters. There was no flow to the story. Detail matters. But 1 thing is you said she was a virgin so no matter she would have felt pain when that guy rammed his dick in her pussy. Also, think about continuity and having even a fantasy make sense.Anonymous readerReport 2010-06-25 21:42:31Pretty great story. It was a little short & didn’t have much detail but all around a great story. With not much detail. Also, think about continuity and having even a fantasy make sense.Anonymous readerReport 2010-06-25 21:42:31Pretty great story. With not much detail. With not much detail.
