9 comments«12»Randy61Report 2017-03-08 22:50:05ANYONE CATCH THE CONNECTION WITH JENNIES STORY IN NYMPHO AT LARGE 3 WITH HER AND HER DADDY’S KISSES AND IN THIS STORY, THE SECOND TO LAST PARAGRAPH ABOUT THE FRENCH KISSING? Work on your structure like others have said and and bring on #2.anonymous readerReport 2013-03-31 19:21:16Story is excellent, definitily worthy of more chapters!!! Txxx Thanks for sharing this.anonymous readerReport 2013-03-31 19:08:28Great story. Please continue the story?«12» Very difficult to follow when jumping POV multiple times per line. lol AH HA!anonymous readerReport 2013-04-01 01:46:49Must work on that shifting point of view. fyi 16 is age of cosent in many states and Florida is one of those states, so no need to keep going on about possible going to jail, that also distracts from the story.anonymous readerReport 2013-03-31 20:44:03Not too bad ata ll.
