except of course for the whole sex thing lolAnonymous readerReport 2009-03-13 23:53:45meh, the story was alright but the writing style definatly needs improvement. redtube i dont know whether i should give it a positive or negative rating. i dont know whether i should give it a positive or negative rating. It was slightly better than the first though.Anonymous readerReport 2008-12-17 19:29:22MAKE A 3RD ONE PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!«1234» if u worked on your editing a bit more then it would novel-ready! except of course for the whole sex thing lolAnonymous readerReport 2009-03-13 23:53:45meh, the story was alright but the writing style definatly needs improvement. Man this story is so good you have got to keep writing.READERReport 2009-07-03 01:30:02amazing talent!! except of course for the whole sex thing lolAnonymous readerReport 2009-03-13 23:53:45meh, the story was alright but the writing style
