You did ok but you need more practice with sentence structure. Tube8 You did ok but you need more practice with sentence structure. Was pretty interesting all in all…careful with extra long paragraphs they are hard on the eyes :)«1» It’s easy giving remarks, isn’t it?READERReport 2004-10-03 21:39:07English is obviously not your first language is it? You did ok but you need more practice with sentence structure. 5 comments«1»READERReport 2005-07-09 06:13:22Keep on writing, interesting as a wholeREADERReport 2005-02-23 11:08:55My 8″ strap on will really make you wet.READERReport 2005-01-06 07:30:20THIS SHIT SUCKS WORST THEN A HARRY POTTER BOOK!READERReport 2004-10-12 10:51:37Great story. It’s easy giving remarks, isn’t it?READERReport 2004-10-03 21:39:07English is obviously not your first language is it?
